Learning Outcome 4

The first time I reviewed someone else’s writing in this class, I think I focused a lot on local revision because that’s what I’m best at recognizing and changing. In this round of peer review, I do a fairly good job of looking more at how the paper flows. Most of my comments about this paper are about sentence length and clarity, instead of the excessive use of commas and semicolons.

On the last page of this paper, I left a comment that said “this is a great way to lead into your main idea. However, the last bit of the sentence doesn’t sound right. Maybe try ‘most can agree that'”. This comment alone shows the amount of growth I had between the first peer review session and this second one. In the first peer review session, I only suggested changes to things like grammar and spelling, but this comment is about the positives of the sentence along with a suggestion to clarify the author’s main idea.